The First Haiku



In a moment you

Tore open my heart, turning

Hot blood into tears.


Few lines but deep .. well said 😊


Nice! Keep at it. Haiku’s are my favorite poetic form! Hard to do actually. Wounded hearts will heal
Tender but resilient
Scarred. Alive. It loves.


It’s good. Try to avoid commonly used phrases; or, if you do use one, use it in a way that challenges the reader to encounter it as if for the first time.


Traditional Haiku is more a celebration of nature. So it usually features elements, seasons, animals etc.

The famous American beat poet Jack Kerouac broke away from traditional Haiku and wrote some amazing pieces. He’s one I would recommend highly, Davy, if you want to see some great examples of non-traditional Haiku. Kerouac actually steps away from traditional structure too.

However, what we in the West see as traditional Haiku with the three line structure is not actually true as the Japanese wrote it as a singular vertical line.

Then there are always the Japanese masters of Haiku – Yosa Buson, Kobayashi Issa, Matsuo Basho, and Masaoka Shiki.

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    Thanks for the comment and links for looking at more traditional Haiku. I am looking at less traditional forms of poetry so will look at the work of Jack Kerouac. Cheers again.


This is a dramatic, passionate piece.


Nice I like it very meaningful

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