Inside the Mind of Davy D
Where Words and Worlds Collide in Poetry
March 4, 2016
Haiku, Love, Poetry
In a moment you
Tore open my heart, turning
Hot blood into tears.
Few lines but deep .. well said 😊
Thank you vickysnaik for taking the time to read and comment. It is appreciated.
Nice! Keep at it. Haiku’s are my favorite poetic form! Hard to do actually. Wounded hearts will heal
Tender but resilient
Scarred. Alive. It loves.
Thank you for reading and your supportive comment is appreciated.
It’s good. Try to avoid commonly used phrases; or, if you do use one, use it in a way that challenges the reader to encounter it as if for the first time.
Thank you Peter for the feedback. It is appreciated.
Traditional Haiku is more a celebration of nature. So it usually features elements, seasons, animals etc.
The famous American beat poet Jack Kerouac broke away from traditional Haiku and wrote some amazing pieces. He’s one I would recommend highly, Davy, if you want to see some great examples of non-traditional Haiku. Kerouac actually steps away from traditional structure too.
However, what we in the West see as traditional Haiku with the three line structure is not actually true as the Japanese wrote it as a singular vertical line.
Then there are always the Japanese masters of Haiku – Yosa Buson, Kobayashi Issa, Matsuo Basho, and Masaoka Shiki.
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Thanks for the comment and links for looking at more traditional Haiku. I am looking at less traditional forms of poetry so will look at the work of Jack Kerouac. Cheers again.
This is a dramatic, passionate piece.
Thank you for taking the time out to read and visit. Your kind words are aappreciated.
Nice I like it very meaningful
Thank you Wendy. I am pleased you like it and appreciate you taking time to visit and comment 🙂
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