Inside the Mind of Davy D
Where Words and Worlds Collide in Poetry
November 23, 2016
Bedsit, Loneliness, Message To Bears, November Notes, Poetry, Senryu, Shadows, Window, You are a Memory
Written for November Notes hosted by Rosema at A Reading Writer and Sarah at Heartstring Eulogies.
Day 23 Music Prompt: You Are A Memory by Message To Bears.
Has a haunting sadness about it and a wistful image of loneliness. It’s great when something moving can be created from such a seemingly undistinguished photograph. Good work, Davy.
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Thank you Roland. Your kind and insightful words are much appreciated.
It’s incredible how the alienation jumps right out of this! Thank you, Davy. Thank you very much.
Thank you. Your comment is greatly appreciated and I am pleased you found time to visit the blog and enjoy this poem.
Thank you Sarah 🙂
Oh dear. I read this right after Forbidden and this is just painful 😦
Thank you NJ. I wanted to get the feeling of loneliness, pain and sadness in this piece and appreciate the feedback.
There’s something about a soiled window, isn’t there? That’s a powerful image. It reaches in. Nice, Davy.
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Thank you Laura. Your insightful feedback is greatly appreciated.
oh. this. this makes me think of someone alone. with no one. and it is heartbreaking. so much in so few, Davy.
Thank you Rosema, that was the feeling I was trying to create so I appreciate your kind words 🙂
Loved this one, Davy! Could see it as a beginning to a longer tale.
Cheers Shaun, it felt like that when I was writing it. Maybe a longer poem or short story. I appreciate you taking time to visit and comment and hope all is well in your world.
No problem, Davy. Thanks for sharing your poems, I always look forward to them (even if I don’t get chance to comment half as much as I should!). If it becomes a short story/longer poem, I’d love to read it 🙂
Thank you Shaun. The fact that you take time out to read them is more than enough 🙂
Forbidden and this one could be both a storyline material
Thanks Mich. I never thought of linking the two but reading your comments and the poem again suggests they could form part of story. I appreciate you taking time out to comment 🙂
I have to agree with everyone else–this is very evocative, almost a throbbing ache of isolation, abandonment. Fine work, Davy.
Thank you Delyn. Your kind words are much appreciated.
It’s fun to be “mutual fans” 🙂
Very powerful image, poem. A sad story, someone sick, bed ridden…I’m feeling their pain!
Thank you Gilda. This poem has been interpreted in different ways, so that is good. I appreciate you taking time out to visit and comment.
Hi Davy, the word ‘through’ and ‘break’ sparked my imagination in this one. Interesting choice of words, creates other-worldly images, a hint of violence maybe.
Violence could have been the reason why they were in the position they were in. Thanks for visiting and taking time out to comment. It is appreciated David.
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