Waiting

Waiting

Loneliness haunts the bones,
Stretching hours where
Grains have started
To invade our memories.

The dog walks
To the door
A thousand times.

Outside the willow tree
Sheds its leaves,
Your neat lawns
Now a meadow.

Still the hall clock ticks.

Still my heart won’t stop.

Choosing only to bleed.

© Davy D 2017

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Your poem moves at a beautifully slow and measured pace which matches its theme so well. Sadness and loneliness depicted with true poetic precision, Davy.

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Nicely expressed, Davy. 🙂

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Oh my. That opening line. 💕

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Powerful sense of longing…and the image of the dog returning again and again – perfect.

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Its like i am doin a slow dance Davy..
That’s the effect of this poem to me…

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P.s.

Is she you doberman you refered to?

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i felt the loneliness that haunts the bones, bone weary lonely is something I would never wish even on a enemy. Felt like there was too much time on the poets hands and nothing to fill them with except grains of memories. Very beautiful!

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Still the hall clock ticks.

Still my heart won’t stop.

That is simply striking! The repetitious use of the word “still” in reference to things not still. The way you use spacing to brilliantly make fresh again the comparison of a clock ticking and a heart beating. The rest of the poem is great too, but that part in particular almost changes your heart rate when you read it. So well done!

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So many deep and universal emotions packed into so few lines that look simple and sparse on the surface. Lovely poem.

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Very nicely put together c:

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oh geez. the details. the powerful opening. geez. geeeez. this is sooo good. heart-clenching, Davy!

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Davy, this is so powerful. I reflected on my own distant, and not so distant, memories. Yet, the clock keeps ticking. I love the way you tied in all those rhythms from day to day life. This one will stay with me for quite a while. (P.S. I left you a rather long response to your comment.)

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Oh dear. You hit the nail when it comes to expressing loneliness. The detailed way you’ve written it would melt the coldest of hearts.

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Beautiful. And thank you for the recent follow! I am following back. 🙂

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this is achingly beautiful

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Yes, I agree with the other commenters – wistful. I like the idea of spacing – it can compliment the meaning of our poems.

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Oh wow, Davy, this does grab the heart, holds it fast. Beautifully done, all of it–but especially the final 3 lines.

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