Unfinished
Davy D · September 19, 2017 · Poetry · Paper, Pen, Poetry, Senryu, Words, Writing · 56 Comments
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56 Comments
So true Davy, reading this I’m struck with the thought that in this laptop land even a humble Bic has garnered an air of romance.
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Very true Nigel. The laptop doesn’t get a look in until the Bic has finished its work. I struggle writing poetry straight on to the computer.
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I agree, Nigel. Lately, I’ve taken to using a notebook and pen for jotting down ideas because there isn’t time to sort them all out on the computer.
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Ooh like that idea Laura ! Imagine sitting by a brook on the edge of a summer meadow and unfurling a cherished, worn leather journal to await those treasured thoughts. You’ve inspired me !
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Nice one, Davy. Is it that sometimes the words just don’t come? I felt like that when I was writing songs. Maybe I should put my words to music instead of my music to words– if that makes sense.
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You should post them on your blog Laura. I think songs are poetry set to music anyway. I have been listening to Bob Dylan’s back catalog of songs and there is some wonderful poetry in there.
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I have dreams of tormenting my followers with a sound channel of sorts–youtube? But I haven’t been playing the guitar because I have more pressing matters to attend to. I feel it will happen all in good time, though. First, I need to get a family member to bring me my guitar from the other house 🙂 I’ve been thinking how it would be a nice way to create and unwind after reading and writing about climate change. It’s important to continue creating beauty. Hope you have a nice weekend at the beach, Davy–Speedos and all!
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Thank you Laura. You may see some headlines in the UK newspapers. Go for the youtube channel. I am in the process of doing one for the poetry.
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Words and Music = Soulmates in a song! Haven’t gotten to counting syllables but have found that if you find a rhythm, your own or borrowed the words seem to come easier.
Chuck
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This is so relatable! Just last night actually.
I normally do write straight onto my computer but have found my thoughts tend to go bigger when I hand write on paper…hmmm time for more caffeine 🙂
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There’s always time for more caffeine 🙂
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I feel the same way Vanessa. When I use a pen on paper it is like an extension of my body. I never get the same feeling when I am writing on the computer.
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Yes, it seems that putting pen to paper is more “artful” and is done with more thoughtfulness while using the computer ends up being more “Stream of consciousness for me. I just love catching words where I can! Ha!
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My pen doesn’t weary, but my mind and inspiration do – all too often. So those ‘spaces on paper’ we lament Davy, do continue to grow.
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I think all writers go through that Roland. Sometimes those spaces contain some great poetry. Thanks for taking time out to enjoy the poem and comment.
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So true, but sometimes it takes so much time to coax the words out of the shadows! Haven’t you guys had to sit on an idea for ages before it finally steps into the light?
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Very effective alliteration, Davy…words waiting to be written. Lovely and provocative. Thank you!
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Thank you for your kind words Gwen and taking time to enjoy the poem and comment.
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I loved that too!!! I’m so addicted to alliteration. Do they have a 12 step program for that?? Ha!
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Words left unwritten, words left unsaid…The torn, aged sheet of paper evokes a feeling of fearing old age & death. Powerful words & image!
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Thanks Gilda, I appreciate your kind words and thoughts.
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Very welcome Davy!😀
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Ooo, so elegant and beautifully said! “Words left unwritten, words left unsaid”. Love the title of your new poem!!! When will you have it finished so we can read all of it??? Ha! No really. That would be a great title and poem!
Chuck
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Thanks Chuck for encouraging words! I might just, who knows…😊👍
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The pen and paper hold no distractions for my undisciplined mind to follow or tweet. Just me, paper and ink.
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We are in the same club Jerry. Any thought has to go on the journey through pen and paper for me. It connects me to the writing. Undisciplined minds are the best, aren’t they?
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Ha! Yes, for me writing is like a hunting or fishing adventure – the words are out there I just have to catch them!
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So true, Davy. I store my ideas in a Word document, which when I get ready to write I select what will spark my imagination. I use my computer, tablet, and phone for everything, except my grocery lists.
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Thank you for the insight into your writing world Eugenia. It is interesting to hear the different thoughts this poem has evoked. Maybe something for a wider discussion at a later date?
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Oh, yes! A Kindred Spirit! I do the same – It’s my “Word Bank” where I make deposits of the seeds of inspiration from others (davy has some deposits with me) until I can use them to have a beautiful poem bloom and blossom! I have found that the voice recorder function on the phone helps me catch my own thoughts, especially while driving!
I have a lot of posts I need to make to the Go Dog Go Cafe’s Inspiration Wall!
Chuck
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I like your voice recorder idea. Anything that helps us store those fleeting thoughts until we use them is helpful. Thank you for your input, Chuck.
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We all have days like that don’t we? Times when minutes turn into hours and distractions take precedence over our words. Suddenly, our engine comes to a complete STOP!!! And then we have other moments when our mind explodes with ideas so quickly and forcefully we can barely get all our thoughts down before they fade away. Nope, you cannot force creativity. Well, actually, as a teacher I know it can be done for an assignment when necessary. But, what can NOT be forced is genius. The perfect words that simply roll off the tongue and onto the paper with ease. THAT is when the magic happens. Isn’t it fascinating how creativity can remain dormant, sometimes for long periods of time, and then suddenly burst into our lives when we least expect it? A writer who is good at his/her craft can write whenever asked to perform, (Rather like an actor reciting a line in a play she has performed a hundred times. But mediocrity is not the same as brilliance.) However, for the irresistible enchantment to happen, something defying logic must take place. And the beauty for me, is that I NEVER know when that will occur.
I really liked this poem. It inspired me. I have a novel, a pretty darn good one I think, gathering dust under my bed, that I stopped working on well over a year ago. I just suddenly stopped on chapter 10 or 11. I think your poem has sparked a little light inside of me to find it, pick it up, and continue to search for the magic that first drove me to write it. Hmmm….Just three lines and you have my mind soaring. Thank you Davy. You made me remember the last time my pen grew weary. And I’m not a quitter so I better find my muse again…. Gracias.
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I loved reading this response Lesley and it has got so many thoughts going in my head about writing and creativity. I am so happy that this poem has inspired you to pick up and continue with your book. It was obviously meant to be written and I would love to see the finished product. The magic was always there, it just needed the right time to flow 🙂
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Yes, the right time for sure. 👍
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Oh my, Lesley! Your response to Davy’s poem is magical in and of itself. I loved it, loved it! You left me a few seeds of inspiration that I want to thank you for!!! So appreciated!
Chuck
Come visit me???
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I will!!!
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Love this, Davy!
Yes, pens and pads of paper are waiting for us to create poems, stories, and to write down our memories! The words are there waiting, too. Weirdly, I assign human feelings to objects like pens and paper. And I think they are lonely when we are not using them to create. 🙂
I still write ideas or a few words or a line down on paper, but I do most of my writing on the computer these days.
I still love the feel of my favorite pen and a notebook! 🙂
HUGS!!! 🙂
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Thanks Carolyn. I agree, sometimes pens become like personal friends. It takes me ages to find the right pen, it has to have the right feel about it. How else could it manage poetry? 🙂
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Wonderful. I am glad I found this. I am missing great work on my reader , Davy.
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Thanks yassy. I think wordpress has become a little like Facebook and is starting to filter posts on its reader. I am finding a lot of posts not coming through on mine from people I follow.
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That is happening to me. I didn’t find your post on my reader. But when I browsed haiku , I got you. It’s weird. Also frustrating
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Perhaps we should have a talk with WP about this??
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Loved this poem!! Three powerful lines!!! I’m just not sure if it is the ink dried up waiting for me, the pen got weary or the words are there but still hiding in the shadows? Thank you so much for this wonderful motivation and “seed” for me. I will have a “Blossom” to show you when you return as a result of this post and an awesome comment by Lesley!! Shall we nickname you “The Pied Piper of Poetry”? The coaxer of poems out of others?
Thank you for the gift!
Chuck
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It would look good on a CV Charles lol. Thank you for your kind words and I am glad you enjoyed the poetry.
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You are right about that! Oh, way more than that. I love it that you leave me seeds to grow new poems that blossom into a life of their own! You are so generous!
Chuck
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It will get me in big trouble one day Chuck lol 🙂
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I will have to wait until my gypsy days end soon to post what you and Lesley left me!
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Look forward to reading it Charles and hope you are safe in your travels.
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This is greatly appreciated Charles. Thank you.
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